I have a treat for you! One half of the dynamic duo that is Mirror World Publishing, home to my soon to be released debut novel Sol of the Coliseum, fellow author and publisher Justine Alley Dowsett has stopped by to share what she, as a publisher, is looking for in a query letter. That's right! Query letter help directly from a publisher! How great is that!
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A good or even great
query letter is not going to guarantee publication with a small press or even a
larger one, but it goes a long way toward your book being noticed and
remembered and that can sometimes make all the difference. The best query
letter I’ve ever received came from Elliot Baker for his novel, The Sun God’sHeir. Elliot has given me permission to share his query letter with you, so I
want to discuss what makes it so great, so you can have an idea what an editor
or publisher, like me, is looking for.
Here goes:
Dear Ms. Dowsett and Ms.
Damodred,
(Even in the opening
line, the author is showing that he has done his research and knows whom he is
addressing +10 points.)
It was a pleasant
surprise to read your request coming on the heels of my former publisher's
unfortunate demise. Thank you for reaching out.
(Here the author
mentions how he/she came across this opportunity. Something like this or really
anything that creates a possible link the author has to the publisher will help
to form an immediate connection in the publisher's mind and therefore make that
author, or his book, stand out. +10 points.)
I am seeking a new home
for The Sun God’s Heir.
(Direct and to the
point. +10 points)
an epic metaphysical
adventure with historical underpinnings
(He tells us what it is,
the genre and possible target audience. Lets us know immediately if it is
something we would be interested in. And, it is. +10 points.)
complete at 105,000
words.
(This information is
actually important. Crucial, even. It tells us how big of a project this is.
Whether it's a short story, a novella or a full-length novel. In our case, we
only publish full-length novels of 50,000+words, but might balk if it was
200,000+words as we don't have the time and man-power to dedicate to a project
that size. No points awarded for this, it should just be included, every time.)
A possible well-worn
comp would be Diana Gabaldon's Outlander series.
(Negative 1 point for
shortening the word 'comparison'. This is a novel he is pitching and he is a
writer, so we expect to see full words used. However, I like the comparison.
You can't go wrong with comparing yourself to a well-loved and undisputedly
well-written novel series. Not necessary, but it helps us to understand again
the style and genre of your book as well as a possible target audience for it.
)
I have completed the
second book in the series along with ninety-thousand words of the third.
(Ok. It's a series, not
a stand-alone. +10 points that he is pitching the first in the series and not
all three. Obviously if we like the first enough to pick it up, we will
probably end up publishing the series, but this way we only have to look at one
book at a time. That being said, it's nice to know in advance that there will
be more to come. It's good to be upfront about things like that. It lets the
publisher make an informed decision and know what they are getting into should
they choose to go forward.)
In 17th-century France,
a young pacifist kills to protect the woman he loves, unwittingly opening a
door for the reincarnation of an ancient Egyptian general determined to
continue a reign of terror begun three thousand years ago.
(A concise synopsis that
captures the imagination and also manages to show a hint of the author's style
at the same time. Excellent +20 points.)
Taking up the sword will
not be enough. Rene must reclaim his own ancient past to stop the red tide of
slavery from engulfing the world.
Joined by a powerful
sheikh, his sword wielding daughter, and a family of Maranos escaping the
Spanish Inquisition, they fight their way through pirates, typhoons, and dark
assassins to reach Morocco, the home of an occult sect that has waited for Rene
through the eons.
(A little more
information now that we're drawn in can't hurt. He tells us what's at stake,
what we can expect, and again hints at genre and target audience.)
Published in July of
2014, I was pleased with the review response the work received on Amazon and
elsewhere. http://tinyurl.com/12345
(Both mentions the
author's history as well as how the book has been received so far by people who
have read it, but doesn't dwell on the details. He also helpfully provides a
link should we wish to research it further ourselves. +10 points)
I understand that
everything is up for change in a re-publication, but I have acquired the images
on the current cover anyway.
(Shows the author is
both flexible and helpful and understands the publishing business. +10 points.
Since authors and publishers are essentially entering into a business
partnership, these qualities are important and it's nice to see them as early
as the query letter.)
Attached please find the
first three chapters and a brief synopsis. Thank you for your time. I look
forward to hearing from you.
(This shows the author
read the submission guidelines and has followed them. He is also again polite
and subtly requesting a response from us. +10 points)
Cheers,
Elliot Baker
So that's... a lot of
points, but the count isn't what's important and neither is following a
template. What you need to do is be yourself, use your own writing style and
hit all the highlights. You're a writer. Let your writer’s 'voice' speak
for you. If a publisher likes your style of writing and its present right from
the query letter, that publisher or editor will be that much more inclined to
like the rest of your work also. A query letter is basically just a first
impression, so make it count!
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A big thanks to Elliot Baker for letting Allie critique his query letter here and a huge thanks to Justine for such an insightful post!
Be sure to check out the Coming Soon page over a Mirror World Press for a list of all their exciting new releases, including my own Sol of the Coliseum coming out next month!
