tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-80248723072912781.post5643722553470807535..comments2024-01-21T00:39:25.784-08:00Comments on Adams Gaylord Writes: Luck 7 Writing ChallengeAdam Gaylordhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10776176053095754224noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-80248723072912781.post-23727383440105420202012-03-13T09:33:50.669-07:002012-03-13T09:33:50.669-07:00Gladiator combat it is! Like the Roman Coliseum bu...Gladiator combat it is! Like the Roman Coliseum but with crazy fantasy beasts. Thanks for the input!Adam Gaylordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10776176053095754224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-80248723072912781.post-34893121467039093372012-03-13T07:50:53.254-07:002012-03-13T07:50:53.254-07:00I really liked the first two paragraphs -- immedia...I really liked the first two paragraphs -- immediately wanted to know more about this world. I'm imagining roman gladiator combat, but where it's not just slaves.<br /><br />I also liked the detail about the noble women trying to be skeletal, and the slaves not being able to avoid it. Nice section! Some punctuation issues, but other than that, it seemed pretty clean. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11304333283822231479noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-80248723072912781.post-71506397617223787682012-03-12T10:08:02.056-07:002012-03-12T10:08:02.056-07:00Interesting snip. It certainly gives insight into ...Interesting snip. It certainly gives insight into your character's personality.Josin L. McQueinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05751043333147850336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-80248723072912781.post-42536688543290117752012-03-08T07:37:32.477-08:002012-03-08T07:37:32.477-08:00Nice catch. Thanks for the small nit-pick (say, is...Nice catch. Thanks for the small nit-pick (say, isn't that a little redundant?). Ha!Adam Gaylordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10776176053095754224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-80248723072912781.post-37918052124475585002012-03-05T10:44:17.717-08:002012-03-05T10:44:17.717-08:00Intriguing!
Just one small nit-pick: you use the ...Intriguing!<br /><br />Just one small nit-pick: you use the word small alongside petite and that's redundant. Petite implies small.<br /><br />Good luck with your querying.Kate Larkindalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06202347563426692610noreply@blogger.com